THE GREATEST STORM
I am going to use onomatopoeia a simile.
As the storm came over
The boats crashed in
On the seashore within
The stormy cloud Came over
As the boats piled over
Walk around to find that we're not in a place you've seen before
As you walked trees waved and the bushes rumbled
A lightning bolt STRUCK
The trees lit on fire
You jump back in a surprise
The rain washes it away
You feel relieved and frightened
You have no idea what to do but you seek shelter for the night
You jump into a boat and start to explore
You find steps on the lift nearshore
As you go up
You find an Office
And as you walk in The floor creaked beneath your feet
And find the Courage
To look to your right
And see a cupboard
You open it and
a skeleton falls out on you scream race out the door
and down the stairs
You race out the door of the boat so exhausted
You fall into the ocean and before you know it in the middle of nowhere.

Hey, Hey, Hey, Hey! That is AMAZING! I LOVE your layout and the end has meet the standed and the success criteria.
ReplyDeleteI like that you actually used onomatopoeia and simile's.
ReplyDeleteYou only have 2 full stops
Thanks Ella for the feedback also LOVE your work and thinks it also meets the success criteria.
ReplyDeleteOK i'll use punctuation.
ReplyDeleteThis is cleverly written. Where did you get your inspiration for this poem?
ReplyDeletehi Vanessa
DeleteMy inspiration for this poem was my personalty which is the dark side sorry if you don't understand